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　　In the past two decades , the enconomy of China  has improving very fast .,and more and more people are moving in the big cities .That leads to a lot of problems.
   
　　There are some obvious problems , just like the problem of public security, the problem of the heavy traffic , the problem of education of their children who move in the big cities , and the the problem of  where they live when they move in the cities.

　　I have some ideas of those problemes .The Government should built more houses ,and rent them with a low price to the inhabitants whose income are low. Allow the enterprises to enter the field of education, so there are enough  schools for children. Improve the condition of traffic, put more buses to use and limit the use of private cars. Strengthen the power of police, and punish the crime with a heavy hand.

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