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　　My View on Reform of Medical Care in China

　　With the development of socialism economics, more and more people pay amount of attention on their heath care .  On the other hand , the expensive medicine and associate examination is the most important obstacle for ordinary people in china. If you want to get the registration of specialists , you would sleep on the ground outside the gate of hospital. And run faster than others to get the special number next morning .

　　What is the main reason of those horrible things.  On my view ,the main reason is the unsoundness of medical care system in China.

　　As a doctor of ultrasonics , as a doctor stand in the first line confront patients directly , here are the suggestion below .

　　First, increase the investment of medical care insurance .

　　Second, improve the consciousness of personal care by lectures and public welfare announcement .

　　Third , improve the quality of medical service ,and support development of hospitals more than before.

　　Finally , we all want to get success of the reform of medical care in our motherland .
　　
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