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　　Nobody could have failed to notice the fact that many people have dramatically moved to citys from the country in china in the past few years. Reports are often heard about the members of the city have rapidly increased.Actually,the phenomenon has been so widespread the it has caused nationwide concern.

　　A number of factor might have led to this problem,but the following are the critical ones. First,the boom of Chinese economic in the past decedes has brought along a sharp increase in the number of occupations in citys. However,many people are not fully aware of the problem of population increasing in citys. Secondly,population increasing in citys have carried a lot of probrems,such as house,eating and so on. Last but not least, the citys have not provided enough previnent for some people who work at citys from the country.

　　To my relief,.that is view as a two-edged sword,which presents us with both benefits and troubles.I think that more and more persons who have become new members of the city form country is a good thing. It can increase the level of their live.We should take out some methods for them and let them become a new member of our family.
　　
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